Thread:Billy Cope/@comment-5091911-20141207140746/@comment-5091911-20141230125357

Impressive but your still over doing it. For a start no one cares about Sofia's innocences or how she is growing to maturity, all that matters is the plot. You still need to learn more about simplification and in my opinion I would write to in a way it would stand out like the rest of the plots we have here.

You are working on a Disney Junior show so I would stay true to what you would write in a Disney Junior show, make it sound friendly and there was never any proof that Cedric would kill Oona that would be too extreme for this show. Disney Junior never uses such words in their shows. Sorry I'm afraid I'm going to have to take down a couple of things.

Try looking around other articles that don't involve Sofia the first and read them, take time to look and them and you may see how we write things because your still being over specific.