Thread:Billy Cope/@comment-5091911-20141211220125/@comment-5091911-20150223201537

I don't like the the notice of sofia's parents are worried while the storm rages because it doesn't work with the pace of the plot and it doesn't matter if its left out and the reason I keep reverting your past edits because the originals sounded better. The read through is good, no extra commas, no over the top fullstops, ands or thats. It fits perfectly like a glove, as it always has since the beginning.