Thread:Billy Cope/@comment-5091911-20170512180301/@comment-5091911-20170515140249

Instead of adding more cut it down to size. Chop up your sentences, throw away all the extra information, and replace a few words. From the way it looks you're trying to include everything that is seen in the episode and keep it in the right order. When it comes to writing plots for this Wiki you're just writing a short easy readable version of the episode. This is why I advised you to use sandboxes. To go through your writing until it sounds perfect.

You've seen how I've re written two plots for latest Sofia episodes, and they sound a lot better without all those long sentences and extra information you put in. You can learn from that.